Too tight

This is about a girl who is self-destructive and ruins her relationship because of her insecurities.

I held your hand so tightly,
for fear of
falling out of love.

You asked me why I spoke so quietly.
I never told you how much I liked that
you leaned in closer,
inches from my lips
just to hear my thoughts.
My words pulled you in, they craved your kisses.

You asked me why I shuddered
when you grazed my thigh or traced my spine.
You never knew that I loved how
vulnerable and scared you made me feel.
You made me feel.

You asked me why I never slept
but the demons in my head tied my tongue.
They awoke every night to bind my mind and echo evil things,
in the sound of your voice.

You asked me why my eyebrows
emulated rain clouds
and drops would run down my cheeks.
I never had an answer,
all those 561 days,
until you told me that I cried too much
and my eyes became a hurricane.

I began to hold your hand so tightly and violently,
you pulled away so quickly.
I suppose you'd fallen out of love.

Reviews

[Maskedthoughts]

I really like this piece, it has heartbreak in it but it's from something so many people feel. I like the way you represented the insecurities through intense imagery and and good flow instead of just sating I feel like this you made me understand. Very well done!

[zainul]

Pure love is not thigh deep and thus should not always be concerned for being fallen out of love.
But,I appreciate your wonderful write.
It expressed your concerns perfectly.

[Trang Vu]

Thank you! And yes, very wise words, I do agree.

[zainul]

You are most welcome!
I appreciate your lovely gesture.

[Sami Khalil]

"You asked me why my eyebrows
emulated rain clouds
and drops would run down my cheeks.
I never had an answer, "

Your poems are very different and unique...Bravo.............

[Trang Vu]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like them :D

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:).......................

[Laura Harrison]

ahh, a sad yet beautiful tale of heartbreak.... this is perfect and very well written, keep up the good work :)

[Trang Vu]

Thank you so much! :)