Oops

Oops

A Poem by BrokenButterfly
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...idk

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Winding road
25(mph), all alone
turn off the music
turn off the noise
tune out the world
as you pass it all by
listen intently
you will hear
the gentle roar
as you steer
engine purrs
keys clank
wind goes by
sweet. Soft.
not enough.
45? 60? 95.
oh yeah...
it rained last night
tight corner
flooded road
oops
breaks squeel
not a chance
two wheels?
one? none.
roof. Wheels.
corn field.
Dead? no.
upsidedown? sideways.
bleeding? yes.
phone? no.
who will help?
who will find me?
isn't there someone there
beside me? no.
all alone.  Listen
water. peaceful
look. soft colors
feel. warmth
sunlight.
beautiful field.
restful waters
restless mind.
 

© 2013 BrokenButterfly


Author's Note

BrokenButterfly
umm.. yeah i have no idea what this was... just started writing

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I think you did really well on it for not knowing. I love how I can understand fully what's going on with such few words. Very interesting piece. Usually when I find works like this, the person won't use the right words, or they'll miss something and just.. it won't make sense. However you seemed to accomplish this rather well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Oh random stuff, i am aa admire of random stuff and i enjoyed this piece.!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this a lot. really caught the feeling of the car flipping....and in the end...there is like a sad acceptance of the whole thing. good poem.
cheers!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Random writng I like it!!! And words that can be related to!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What I liked was the fast pace of your words during the accident, seemed disconnected like words were missing and in an accident that is how we remember it, bits and pieces that we have to put together, Free flowing a good write to me.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I write when emotions are raw, and almost uncontrollable. It is a temporary fix to a long term problem - having too many thoughts in my head. Sometimes they just need to come out. more..

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