Wholeheartedly

Written for the "Please Explain! 3" contest.

Wholeheartedly

 

with the child

now growing, inside,

 

she swore

wholeheartedly...

 

that she would

 do anything

 

to give it something

better than herself

 

5-20-08

Reviews

[Jessica J]

How wonderfully heartbreaking. I swear to you, I teared up on that last line... "to give it something better than herself". Beautiful.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Ama-zah-zing.You're fantastic at this. I can't wait till my children are reading about you in their English classes, and I can say, "Yep. I knew him. He wrote one of those poems based on a picture I stole from photobucket. Those were the days!" lol. Great work again!
KH

[Pj]

That's so beautiful- I think this is one of my fav's. I love logging on and reading some of your stuff...it's like a song, you get so much from it in such a small amount of time.
Nice work as always!

[James Takeo Panton]

Truthful, simple, and intimate

Excellent!

[Serendipity]

Wow, so much in just a few words.

How painfully true. What we won't do to give our children everything. Even if it means sacrificing ourselves. And we do it gladly.

[Imperfection]

You have this quality to express so much in few words. Like most of your other writings, there is a whole story in these lines.
Incidentally, I just a posted a piece on the same theme.

Most women who make this promise fulfil it, no matter what.

[closed account]

ahhh how precious!!!

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Very nicely done, and all the best in the contest.

[Mary Quast]

Deep. For some reason it made me think of a child I know who was born with only half of a heart. I could picture his mother when she was pregnant with him thinking what words your poem speaks. As a mom, I felt my heart grow larger w/ each child... as if the wholeness was more... for more love.

[Kristin Brecoe]

this was a nicely done poem. good luck in kristens contest. =]