Too Long

Found this poem I wrote years ago. Thought I'd share. Its always interesting to see how your own poetry evolves, not just in style but in theme as well.

Everything about you drives me up the wall

If I had to count the ways, I couldn't count them all

Our steps are not in sync, we don't see eye to eye

If I'm a bird you're a fish, I can't swim and you can't fly

If its not one thing its another, our conflicts are never ending

We're rarely ever happy, if we act like it we're pretending

The difference between what I want and what you don't

What I want is change and that’s something that you won't

Why try to compromise and settle for what we know is wrong

And draw out any longer what’s already gone on for too long

Reviews

[Mary Christabel George]

There is so much maturity i the write though you say it was written very long ago.
There has been a great writer out there since then.
You play with the words & write a thing that pierces one's heart.
You are one of the best writers whom I have known in WC & surely a Gifted writer.

Ma fav lines are -
"If I'm a bird you're a fish, I can't swim and you can't fly"
"Why try to compromise and settle for what we know is wrong"

[KeelyJane]

Thank you so much. I'm flattered.

[Ency Bearis]

Poignant poem

[John F Carver]

sad.

[Angi]

There is knowledge and relief in figuring out it just can't work. Angi~

[gombeggar]

definitely sounds like most married couples...kinda amusing though

[Rita L. Sev]

This lays it on the line, right from the start. You speak of the reality of a relationship that just isn't working - and the wisdom of knowing that it's time to move on. Well done.

[Simon Welsh]

Sometimes the question is not why but how. How can something so painful last so long?

[B-poet]

A very intriguing write. Relationships are about give and take as well as compromise. You've made so strong vaild points towards the overall theme you were conveying here. Great work. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Interesting. Loved the flow of the first few lines but found the final line overly wordy.

[quinfinn]

in a relationship.....never settle. if you are incompatible...somebody has to hit the road. excellent write, full of simple truths and familiar issues....well done!

[Sami Khalil]

"Everything about you drives me up the wall
If I had to count the ways, I couldn't count them all"
A good rhyming poem with some vent up emotions...:)