my destiny

Life never gives a second chance for anything
But first one is like walking on broken pieces of glass

No matter how much I try...!!
In the end only I have to shed a tear...!
No matter what ever I do....
In the end everything comes to me...!

Whether good or bad I do....!
I have to face troubles...
Whether I smile or laugh....
Tears always walk my way...!

No matter how nice I try to be....
I always find fingers pointed at my side...
How much I sacrifice...
Friends never walk by my side...

It’s rude it's crude...
It’s happy it's sad...
It smashes it clashes....
But life leads to what destiny creates....

Author's Note

this is the one i wrote...!!when i had a horrible fight with someone very close to my heart...!...
and this one very close to my heart...!!

Reviews

[barricade]

Can feel the tears all over this write...the pain, the sorrow...the yearning...the endless efforts and the valiant justifications...the words that go unheard, the efforts that go unnoticed...

"Life never gives a second chance for anything
But first one is like walking on broken pieces of glass"

a truly heartfelt write...deep and sad...struck a chord...left me thinking...thinking about my own...and what i got in return...
but I'll just say "in life you will get hurt...fingers will get pointed at you no matter what you do...people will never be satisfied...call it destiny or whatever...but the final choice is in your hands...you decide what's worth it...the PAIN or the PERSON"

a great write Vaishali...loved it!!! could completely understand how you feel...just hold yourself girl...if it's yours to keep...you shall have it...! because somethings are MEANT TO BE....

regards
barricade...

[Kelley]

I know how it can feel when you get in a big fight with a close friend.
This was a great poem and I think it could be a little better with some
tightening up. I'll make some suggestions ad hope you do't get upset
with what I say.

How much nice I try to be....
you might try.........No matter how nice I try to be....

and ....

It's rude, it's crude...
It's happy, it's sad...
It smashes, it clashes....
But life leads to what destiny creates....


I hope I have helped in some way?
Thanks for sharing.

Kelley

[deeps]

Full of sadness and gloom. I can really feel the emotion.
This is wonderfully expressed. I can really feel your sorrow and pain.

[Ralphy]

My destiny is wonderful write although very sad and full of pain. Destiny is a misconception if you feel it will bring you pain, for destiny is the path you choose to reach your most precious dreams. Unless your dream are on the avenue of a righteous path that perils a might venture, your destiny is always before you.
Things happen In a world that can't always be explained, nor should we always question such phenomenon as an act of destiny. Whether you're young or old, our destiny is a part of our dreams and at some point in time the dreams should become our destiny....nice write

[Just Plain Me]

This is really good...to say the very least :)

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. so sad .. the emotions pouring out of your heart .. I can feel the pain you have not registering any type of acknowledgement in return for being nice to so many others.. there is a saying that nice guys finish last.. problem is alot believe that line.. believe that being bad is more fun.. when that is just a lie and the easy way out!!! It is much tougher to be nice sometimes.. don't change for them though.. search for the diamond in the rough.. like yourself.. a divine heart and soul.. just watch who you give your heart to! I sense devotion extreme here.. you keep being nice and being ignored or just not getting the same in return.. which can hurt your self-esteem.. have to have balance.. give and take.. I am learning this!!! Thank you for sharing.. =)