Pick up Phone

Pick up Phone

A Poem by Killer
"

This is for my wonderfully stupid boyfriend. For making me worry like hell.

"

Pick up the phone.

I'm tired of waiting at home.

Are you just gonna leave me all alone?

Its hard enough to breathe without you here.

Please dear.

 

Pick up the phone.

Answer your texts.

See I've been  trying to get you over here.

If You really want my heart to break..

 

Pick up the phone.

I know your alive, keeping it in time.

You would never ever leave me.

Thats when I realized you forgot...

 

To pick up the phone and pay your bills.

© 2012 Killer


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Killer
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Your subject's anxiety comes through very powerfully and consistently, and the last three words "pay your bills" validates it and drives it home. It leaves the reader wondering how the subject feels now. Very nice!
You start off with rhymes in the first stanza then abandon them in the next two which is the only inconsistency I can see. Over all very powerful and real. Way to go Killer!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

william keepers

7 Years Ago

Of course I can, I would be delighted to read it. And please just call me william.
william keepers

7 Years Ago

I mean you can send the first chapter
Killer

7 Years Ago

haha.. Of course, William :)



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Your subject's anxiety comes through very powerfully and consistently, and the last three words "pay your bills" validates it and drives it home. It leaves the reader wondering how the subject feels now. Very nice!
You start off with rhymes in the first stanza then abandon them in the next two which is the only inconsistency I can see. Over all very powerful and real. Way to go Killer!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

william keepers

7 Years Ago

Of course I can, I would be delighted to read it. And please just call me william.
william keepers

7 Years Ago

I mean you can send the first chapter
Killer

7 Years Ago

haha.. Of course, William :)

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