Underneath the Sun

Ebony arose

As the sun crossed the mountains

Slid out of their bed

She showered and dressed

Did her hair and her make up

Today was the day

Her dress was perfect

She was ready for the morn

Though she felt unsure

The ring in her purse

Was constantly on her mind

Butterflies abound

But she remembered

The day when her life began

The day Morgan came

She stayed through the night

And woke up at dawn's first light

Bodies intertwined

Ever since that dawn

They stayed true to each other

Shared a love unbound

Now was the day that

Their two hearts would become one

Under the sun

Reviews

[acloudrift]

Pretty good, the haiku form in 8 continuous verses. I wonder if the names of the characters have any extra significance? If they did, I would be even more impressed. Next, you should write a sequel, part 2 of the story, 8 more verses.
(Sorry, but this is my first review here, am not giving a rating, and maybe the comment is not helpful.)

[Jesse W.]

The comment is helpful. I hadn't considered doing a series, but that's not a bad idea at all. Thank you :)

[Chris]

a good story. It felt like a wedding day's arrival.

[Jesse W.]

I'm happy about that, that's exactly what I meant for the feel to be :) thank you!