Graveyard heart

Graveyard heart

A Poem by anne

You told me you needed to escape

so I ran,
but you never followed.

They say there are some things
you cannot outrun.

They say your body was one of them. 
You with your tough skin, 
your angry hands
grabbing bottles like door knobs.
Your teeth out there like a trigger warning,
like a bad dream,
like some background comment saying
"just don't get too involved." 
You with your graveyard heart. 
You've stepped on bodies that were your own,
tucked your heart into the bottom drawer.
Decided to wear quieter things 

on your sleeve.

There are some things 

you cannot outrun.

© 2016 anne


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My favorite lines:

"your angry hands
grabbing bottles like door knobs"

I dont know why but I just love that stanza. Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"things you can't outrun" simply says it all...candid !


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anne

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
I kissed your loneliness on the face
last night.
Told it this is healing....

Very romantic, seems a love can only heal a love & nothing more....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tremendously evocative. Cut the last three lines and construct the poem around the visual descriptions of the dude. Make ME understand why even I wouldn't be able to...or wouldn't even want to...outrun this dude.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this poem and the raw emotions it evokes. I think most of us have person like that in our lives who takes our hearts and crushes everything. I certainly have one. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anne

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much!! That really means a lot to me.
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Ron
Love the title of your poem and the flavor of writing..Nice work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anne

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much, that means a lot!
-- i really like the title and the way it unravelled in this piece... when you described someone with a "graveyard heart"... -- and the closing is very moving...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anne

8 Years Ago

Thank you!! I really appreciate your kind words and that you took the time to read it. I hope you're.. read more
"Decided to wear quieter things on your sleeve" I love that. And the compassion in the conclusion for this angry human makes my heart hurt.
"Like a bad dream" I would cut or get more specific

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anne

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your words! They mean a lot to me. I will definitely think about the "like a b.. read more

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Added on December 11, 2015
Last Updated on April 23, 2016
Tags: poetry, writing, words, heart, love, graveyard