Sinkhole

Sinkhole

A Poem by Keith Allen Covell
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- Environmental destruction - - Hope for restoration -

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I want to see a better day
When we no longer eat away
Our Nature from It's core

Our precious Nature...

I need to know a better day
When we no longer ate away
Our Nature through It's pours

Our precious Nature...

I have to find a better me
That doesn't cause destruction
I have to find a bolder me
That stands up to constriction

Our precious Nature does not deserve
This pollution that we often serve
This disrespect, neglect will have
Us sinking through the stone, at last

-Keith Allen Covell

© 2019 Keith Allen Covell


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Keith Allen Covell
Comment away.
You deserve to be free.
Respect and protect our Home.

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the "ate" in Stanza 2 is the only only thing that's awkward in this poem (despite what I believe your intention to be with the use of that word, it just doesn't work - and poetic licence wouldn't legitimize it as it would still sound awkward). It would be good to pick a different word so there's a little variety too ("wear" perhaps? you pick). But this is otherwise amazing. And good use of the dead hummingbird pic too. Well freaking done!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

I'm positioning myself in the future in that stanza, looking back.
Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading.
Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

I thought it was cool. :)



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Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks much. :)
To you to, ❤❤❤ s.
Note:

Consider these lines:
"I need to know a better day
When we no longer ate away"

"Ate" is in the proper tense when you consider someone putting themselves in a future scenario, looking back on a time that would be after their present time. In other words, a longing to have particular thoughts, feelings, and factual securities at a point in the future.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks man. I appreciate this.
I actually found out later that it was used in this manner a .. read more
emipoemi

3 Weeks Ago

....I'm not debating that it has been done (or that it could work), but you as a writer have therefo.. read more
Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

Disagree...sometimes having to figure something out places far greater value on it and pushes the re.. read more
the "ate" in Stanza 2 is the only only thing that's awkward in this poem (despite what I believe your intention to be with the use of that word, it just doesn't work - and poetic licence wouldn't legitimize it as it would still sound awkward). It would be good to pick a different word so there's a little variety too ("wear" perhaps? you pick). But this is otherwise amazing. And good use of the dead hummingbird pic too. Well freaking done!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

I'm positioning myself in the future in that stanza, looking back.
Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for reading.
Keith Allen Covell

3 Weeks Ago

I thought it was cool. :)

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Tags: writing, poetry, self exploration, self destruction, mind games, spilled thoughts, stream of conscious, nature, environment, destruction, coexistence, hope, God, spiritual, faith, greed, faithlessness

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Keith Allen Covell
Keith Allen Covell

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I have been writing in all different forms since I was ten years of age. I enrolled in a military school that focused hardcore on broadcast journalism. I aggressively studied and performed newscasting.. more..

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