Road to Rescue

how far would you go to cleanse your body, soul, mind and spirit of all the many sins you've committed?

 

Snow fell soft,

Gentle, safe

Tangling in her luscious curls

Bouncing

In time with each drop

Pitter patter, splatter splash

 

Hail fell,

Hard, raw

Stinging her mind

Beating

Against her face

As each tear leaked

 

Rain fell

Soft, fierce

Breaking all pattern, ending silence

Sliding

Along her chest, tracing every curve

Never forgiving

 

The wind blew

Cold, cruel

Whipping her, driven by rage

Biting

Freezing her, icy in vain and punishment

 

It stopped

Confusing, hollow

Roaring deafeningly in her ears

Striking

Her breath was ragged, guttural

She was alive

Apathy forgiven

 

Redemption was reborn

 

Author's Note

a rough truth - the road to redemption may be the road less traveled. and that makes it no less right. to stand up is courage - to shun is igorance.

Reviews

[R J Askew]

These are my favourite lines...
Tangling in her luscious curls
Stinging her mind
Roaring in her ears
...I think it is the use of great verbs. They make the poem seem very active as if a great struggle is going on.

[Somebody you've already..]

very descriptive, i loved the onamonapia's. it was a powerful poem and I liked it so much. keep writing.

[Legion]

Descriptive and deep. I like it. Mine would probably be by fire though. Good write.