Feeling

This one is based off of a situation that happened when I was 14.

I had a feeling that would not go away.  A feeling of pain and suffering.  Something was about to happen.  Something was not right.  If only I knew then what I know now.

It was just a normal day, but a cloud hung over my head.  I could not shake the feeling that something bad was about to happen.  The house was quiet and all seemed well,, but I knew how quickly that could change.

I had a feeling that would not go away.  A feeling of pain and suffering.  Something was about to happen.  Something was not right.  If only I knew then what I know now.

He pushed, he shoved, he beat, he raved and ranted, but yet I knew that would not be the worst of it.  I sat in my room blasting my music, trying to shake the feeling, that a gun was about to go off.

I had a feeling that would not go away.  A feeling of pain and suffering.  Something was about to happen.  Something was not right.  If only I knew then what I know now.

Things calmed down, no gun was used.  But I still couldn't shake the feeling.  As the house went to sleep the feeling got stronger.  The quiet house became louder with a scream, "Sarah call 911"

(sound of a gun clicking)

Reviews

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Wow, umm, were to begin? For starters I could really feel the emotion that you were trying to convey and I felt the fear and like something is wrong. A very good read, a little scary at the end though : ).