1 tic 2 tock 3 click Bye!

A poem that mixes a little of my recent phases of life with fiction.

Life to me is like life to you

1 difference is mine got screwed

If I fail again then ill have to go

Maybe next time my dumbass will say no

My consequences are the cards that life dealt me.

That’s why I’m screaming 911 help me!

Now people don’t hear me anymore

Once my life was good, I had the chance to soar

But I fucked it up, my life is gone

Now I’m sitting here asking myself what I did wrong

But I look in my head and see the paramedics

And now they’re prepping me with anesthetic.

I’m going on under the knife so now its time

I’m singing 1 tic 2 tock 3 click bye!

 

Author's Note

Feedback would be nice so i know if it sucks or not (:

Reviews

[Amila Jay]

This is a great poem, i like this one and the starting two lines are really good:)

[Taji Herbert]

sometimes the world swallows you alive and this is what i feel is portrayed in this poem. but it is never too late your poem is morbid but what alot of people feel is reality deep!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

loved this line:
"That’s why I’m screaming 911 help me!"
the ending so sad, this has power to it too,
i like the tittle and how you used it in the poem as well.
well thought, i liked this.