My Nightmare

Feels like i'm dying;

out of the lies you told me;

nothing seems right;

so i'm leaving you tonight;

only time can tell;

what will come of us;

you know nothing, nothing at all;

cause i feel like i'm not here;

i'm in a nightmare;

a nightmare where i'm alone;

alone with out you;

with only the pieces of my shatter heart;

wake me up,wake me up, tell me its only a dream;

tell me you didn't cheat, tell me shes a lie!

don't make death seem like an option;

don't make the room smaller;

wake me up please;

prove shes wrong;

don't leave me in my nightmare.

Reviews

[Niki]

yea there's an extra the in the second line. Whoops

[Alexander W. Quinn]

The emotions are focused really well and you have a strong impact. I think you slipped an extra "the" in the second line by mistake, but the poem itself is wonderful. Great job.

[Tessa Le Rouge]

i really liked it. i feel the emotions. good job.

[Erin]

very raw. The emotion shines through, good job.