From Her Dreaming To Mine

Yep...talk about an effin muse.

 

There is something

perfect

          about

                     you.

Makes me feel like

 spending forever,

     in pursuit,

trying to attain it,

perfection,

you...

Like a comet's course

warped by the gravity

of a larger mass,

a planet even,

and hurled

forever

into the

limitless-ness

(our favorite word)

of space

forever

and ever

belonging to the bosom of

the infinite,

like

me to you,

you to me.

 

You...

make my soul spasm

and vibrate so

intensely

that I have no choice

but

to write

of you

for you

about you.

Can't you see what you've done?

 

"Would you be happier then?"

you're friend so

perfectly

asked.

A resounding

no.

I am happier now

      and now

         and now.

 

The collision course for

our stellar masses

is set.

Let's enjoy the ride,

dear.

Reviews

[Rachel DeHart]

"Would you be happier then?"
you're friend so
perfectly
asked.
A resounding
no.
I am happier now
and now
and now.

The collision course for
our stellar masses
is set.
Let's enjoy the ride,
dear."

I love those lines. All of them.
The whole last part of the poem made my heart skip... This is fantastic!

[Dani California]

This is wonderful! The flow is awesome,
and I think works perfectly with the unfolding
of this piece.

This takes me into another realm..
another place... where true love exists ... where
dreams come alive ... some place ... magical.

I am happier now
and now
and now

I just love that! :) It speaks now being forever... happier.

Dani_Mo sent this to me and I'm so glad she did. Wonderful work!!

[Michael X]

I sincerely enjoyed the scope of depth accentuating the meaning, brings the
writing to another level, imo, and helps to justify the form, the idea
has rolling motion, and captures the readers attention and holds it with
the flow, three main things worked well, the word choice, form and function.

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Ahhh, Mr. Mike, when did you post this one? I love this one....

"Would you be happier then?"

The $64,000 question. The answer, is in an envelope that has been slipped under the dressing room door. "5 minutes to airtime" is called out to me from outside the door. Ms. K, envelope in hand, heart pounding, diliberates on whether to open the envelope and accept the answer given to her... by someone else.

Stage is set, lights go up, curtain rises and it's time for the show. Exhilaration.

Cut back to the dressing room where an envelope lies unopened on the floor.

She's gonna take her chances. She is ready for the ride...

This is just great... have a super day Duuude!!!!

Ms. K

[Lady Lazarus.]

*sheds a tear*
this is absolutely beautiful.....

"You...
make my soul spasm"
is an incredible line.
I'm just so happy for you love.
This is hardcore!

[Bear]

those souls that "make us" write our thoughts of them.... I know those emotions very well but then, you knew that didn't ya? ;~) This is a fine write!! Almost as if you entered my mind and put my elusive thoughts into poetic form for me.

Thanks!! ;~) A fine write indeed!! Sallie Bear

[misskara]

"You...make my soul spasm"
"now
and now
and now'

intense my dear. i love the way the words pour out of you. always.