Zombie

Today I found out that I've become just exactly what I hate...

I know that is ain't a way to live
I know that this life has more to give
If not for the smoke I blow into the air
I’d think I wasn’t breathing at all
This so called “life”, it just ain't fair
And my world has just become so small
The mist pressures my lungs to give out
Discretely my fingers traces the knife
As I’m searching for reasons to shout
The words that’ll give meaning to this life
Don’t you look at me in that way
I already know, you are here to judge
But this is it, I have no more to say
About the way I am, I wont budge
Today I found that I have changed
This isn’t me, I’ve become deranged.

Reviews

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Sometimes if it wasnt for the smoke we breath i think most of us wouldnt know we were breathing loved that my friend.
A very strong work and thank you for reading my first post here
you have a great way of connecting with the reader

great work on this cheesr Gonzo

[Moflo]

This is actually really good! You have a good use of emotion and the descriptions are very strong and telling. Good work!!