Delusion

The girl looked like a happy bird
She was a perfect beauty without any flaw
Her  manners matched with a nerd
Seeing her may give a feeling of awe

She rendered a sweet melodious song
She performed her task with perfection
Her words danced in my heart for long
I was fully  amazed by her dedication

I switched to a nearby spot after the event
Talking with other persons on related matter
Spending with them wonderful moment
I enjoyed the pleasant atmosphere

Suddenly the girl came  and stopped before me
She  wanted to ask a simple question
I  was wondering what her query could be
Then I gladly accorded my permission

She told me that she loved a handsome man
But he never responded to her passionate call
She thought about him again and again
She feared that she could not stop her fall

I became very pleased with her polite gesture
But failed to give her a perfect solution
Human mind is like an unknown pasture
That's why we have to live in delusion




 

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

This is simply amazing, Dear Poet, incredible imagery your words have captured,
Very descriptive in depicting these two characters, not to mention, the atmosphere.


Sometimes one needs to delusion themselves until they either have no choice
But to face reality, or find the strength to. Brilliantly insightful with both meter
And choice of words. It's always a pleasure to 're visit your work of art, zainul...
Pen on! 100/100

[zainul]

Hi Barrie,I feel very fortunate to read your wonderfully written heartfelt review.
Your review enlightened me on the causes of delusion.
Thank you dear friend for stopping by to glorify the work.
Have a nice time.:)

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, zainul, the pleasure was all mine to read! Thank you, you as well
Namaste :)

[Paul Seaman]

I dont want to live in delusion! :-)

It rhymed and could be read at a certain tempo. Might make a nice spoken word piece, as it is clear and offers ample visual ques.

[zainul]

Thank you Paul for taking time to read and review the piece.
Your admiring review has inspired me to keep writing.

I appreciate your desire not to live in delusion.:)

[Lydia Shutter]

We often do delude ourselves....thinking we have a chance with a particular person when in reality there is not a chance at all. The fact the girl asked you about her love life could have been a let down....you probably were hoping she would be interested in you. The imagery you used to describe her was so vivid...I could picture you watching her flit around the room. Her beauty had captured you. Good rhyming, Zainul. Lydi**

[zainul]

Thank you Lydia for your sagacious review.
I feel very glad that you considered all aspects of the events surrounding the piece.
Yes,her beauty captured me.
I hope she will enjoy a very happy life.:)

[Praveeta]

Wonderful piece my creative friend. Nicely penned.

[zainul]

Thank you Praveeta for the great review and nice compliments.:)

[Praveeta]

My pleasure.

[Laura Harrison]

This is a very beautiful poem Zainul, and you speak wise words :)

[zainul]

I love your wonderful and admiring review,Laura.
Thank you for stopping by to grace this piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"human mind is like an unknown pasture/ that's why we have to live in delusion"

wow...love those lines...there really seem to be no perfect solutions in life...we just add it all up the best we can.

[zainul]

Thank you jacob for focusing on the heart of the write.
You have nicely concluded that there really seem to be no perfect solutions in life...we just add it all up the best we can.
I feel very blessed by your extraordinary review.:)

[Heather]

I love this! especially the fact that it truly reflects on life and the ways of our minds, it is fast paced and made me want to read on, it has a solid base and is beautifully written, great job!! :)

[zainul]

Thank you Heather for taking time to read and review the piece.
This means a world to me.:)

[Heather]

No problem! you are very welcome! :)

[Marie]

It's a shame this man could not care for her, since she seems like a sweet and lovely person. But hearts choose who they will...

[zainul]

Thank you Marie for stopping by to present the compassionate review.