‘The Eternal Echo of a Screaming Soul’

‘The Eternal Echo of a Screaming Soul’

A Poem by Hello, Goodbye
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..residual aches of an emotional break..

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Look through my eyes so you can see, 
The pain that dwells inside of me. 
The pain that shreds and rips apart, 
The fabrics of joy within my heart. 

Look through my eyes so you can see, 
The open wounds inside of me. 
A soul that echoes, recollections of pain, 
Vibrations of anguish that enduringly drain. 

Look through my eyes so you can feel, 
The residual ache that is much too real. 
The progressive sorrow that haunts my heart. 
A hurting that has extinguished a once luminous spark


- DespondentDreamer

© 2010 Hello, Goodbye


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First off, I love the rhyming scheme. I know exactly how you feel which I believe is the purpose of poems like these, so that people can understand you when it seems like no one does. If that's an incorrect interpretation then I apologize, but that's the way I see it. I really liked it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I love how each line starts with "Look through my eyes". I think it's really unique and meaningful, the whole thing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow....i dont even know what to say to this! very very powerful poem. it was beautiful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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ok this is honestly the only poetry that rhymes that makes sense to me. this is incredible! u are amazing! I understand this and i feel ur pain. amazing flow and i love the spark part at the end. Overall awesomeness.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is beautifully scanned love, pangs of such sorrow are immense here :) Sometimes, they seem on the surface but truly, we have to dissect pain to heal it, its not a pleasant thing but a sad truth!
Great poem love
xx


Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the way you express your pain, and eye's do let you see alot about people..
Very nice..

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love it. The darkness in the message speaks lifes truths.

Posted 13 Years Ago


They say the eyes are the gateway to the soul. And oh is this soul tormented. I'm a sucker for rhyme as most know so this one just hits the spot. There's a child-like essence in the flow, but the words when working together in the stanzas reveal a complex issue no child could understand. I like that contrast very much. Good work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I could almost hear this as music :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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so few ever dare to look directly into eyes of another~ because there are layers and layers of depths reflecting the whirpools of the soul~ deeply haunting beautiful poetic~

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Added on September 7, 2010
Last Updated on September 7, 2010
Tags: Despondency, Eternity, Emotions, Gloom, Fear

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Hello, Goodbye
Hello, Goodbye

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