Empire of Ashes

..the gloom that consumes..

Do you feel tired.. by the constant reminder?

Because I have become exhausted, by lacking a feeling of desire.. 

Do you feel weighed down by the notion?

The constant despondent feeling that burns like fire.. 

Do you curse death and perplexed by life?

I dont wish for a conclusion merely to retire.. 

Do you feel gloom with every constant reminder?

The feeling that consumes, making ashes out of an empire. 

Reviews

[Liza]

interesting title; if ashes really could stand still and remind us the empire it once burned - we would feel the everlasting fire - the author seems to want to escape reality and it is a feeling we can all relate to...

[Sel Whiteley]

I think we all fel like that sometimes. Your use of questions makes the poem engaging. The language is simple and therefore has applicability for everyone

[Dream Weaver]

Hard hitting and relevant...
Nicely done...

[JENY]

Ashes out of empire..
A very different and touching imagery...
liked the way you put down the pain....
Kudos...

[Ladysue]

oh this is sad making ashes out of an empire...but this was brilliantly written...