Stranger

1-6-10

A stranger in the crowd.

But a stranger not.

His features I recognize.

His gestures are true.

 

Walking closer.

"You're not the first."

"I'm not the last."

Walking beside me.

Walking away.

His features fading.

 

A quiet dismissal.

 

And another walks closer.

Reviews

[Mike Espinosa]

Very cool. I like your use of simple sentences, they are quite efficient. Your use of brief conversation was cool, but a little confusing, only because I'm not sure who said what, but in the end, I don't think that is an important aspect of the poem. It could be said by either, and the meaning would still shine through. I love this metaphor. Good job!

Noting your "grammar nazi" blurb, I believe "His features I recognize." should have a comma after 'feature,' since you could switch the parts and make another "proper" sentence.