the lightbulb

that feeling you get

there is a light.

protecting us from evil.

it hangs above our heads.

hold onto our hearts.

it is quite a beautiful thing.

it's name is hope.

but sometimes the light

flickers a little.

leaving us feeling

empty.

depressed.

angry.

broken.

when this light flickers.

it brings out the worst of us.

as if someone is pulling your heart

right

out

of

your

chest.

for some, their light goes completely out.

leaving only the dark left

will you fix my broken light?

Author's Note

you wouldn't believe the amount of spelling mistakes i made while i was typing this haha.
this was just like a really quick jot in my notebook, what suggestions do you have??? don't be afraid to be harsh tho like whatever it takes to make this decent.

Reviews

[Relic]

You've got lots of punctuation errors but I think the metaphor is so good I didn't care. Very clever. I'm watching the storm that is destroying the Bahamas. This poem is pretty timely.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

just read this again today love it, thanks.

[Mariam Khodeir]

I like the concept; it comes together so smoothly. I would just make some very minor editing; like maybe remove 'the' before evil.

[ziggythelover]

thank you, i will do that!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I wouldn’t change a thing I liked the flow and style thanks for this entry into my competition

[ziggythelover]

thanks that means a lot to me!