FALLEN

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fallen dOwn
fallen tO the end
fallen with a message..can't be send
fallin dOwn..i am the missed

i need yOur hold..take me Out of that cOld
fallen dOwn..i need yOur hand
take me Off..Out Of that sand
i walk On the land
i call my lOrd..stOp my tearS
gOt flOod

fallen dOwn..can't sleep my night
fallen dOwn..can't say he might
been alOne sO lOng with nO fOund
Under the rain alOne walking arOund
searching fOr sOmeOne'S whO i miss..his sOund
i need Ur light..i am the the One..can't be fOund

fallen dOwn
fallen dOwn
fallen tO the end
fallen with a message..can't be send
nO fOund
fallen dOwn
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Reviews

[Amila Jay]

love the flow, excellent write:-)

[hmm]

just love the ending alot, so much emotion, tugs gentely on my heart. Like the way you set this up shows creativity.

[Sarah]

nice work...

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

This is really very good. I like whole poem. Keep it up!
Do you read mine too "ANGUISH and SHE"
God bless you!
Lucky!

[Branch Isole]

A message of the desire within a struggle to continue to try again and again is aptly shown in this piece.

[habiba]

Oh..thnX :D...lOve Urs tOo

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I can feel your emotions in this write,
I think this write is really good.
Makes one ponder a bit, love it!