7 Deadly Sins - a linked Senryu

7 Deadly Sins

Pride

I don’t need your God
Your God needs my approval
I’m The Great I Am

Greed

Oil wealth is the goal
Ravage their land and spill blood
The point must be clear

Envy

Life just isn’t fair!
On this Earth, tint means struggle
I wish I was White

Wrath

My husband beats me
God’s vengeance was less than swift
Blood pours from his head

Lust

I’ve got to have it
whether her or him or them
Disease - I give all

Gluttony

I sniff so much coke

I have a hole through my nose

blackened with cancer

 

Sloth

I have never worked
stayed with Mom until her death
Can I stay with you?

 

 

Tara S. Gause

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Reviews

[Nameless]

Senryu's focus on humanity or human nature. Senryu's consist of 1 stanzas 5-7-5.

[Tony Williams]

I love the idea. Great job capturing the nature of the Sins. I like how it is told from the first person so as to invoke some disgust from reader.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I like the idea. I was sort of disappointed to see "My husband beats me" there. It seems that there is a national willingness to assume that all men turn into savage monsters when they marry. I guess the cure would be if none of us ever marry again.

But I digress. The poem was a very original idea to use seven Senryus as stanzas in a poem. I think it came off quite nicely. I enjoyed it very much.

[Charles D. Moorer]

A very original take on the seven deadly sins.