Poison

About the gifts of love.

See me,

 

Lie to me

 

Pretend

 

Place the necklace of love onto my neck,

 

Enjoy your conquest

 

Let your demons out of their cage

 

Make the necklace turn into a serpent

 

Posses me

 

Use me

 

Kill me

 

Love me

 

Lose me

 

Taste my poison

 

Die inside

 

and hate me.  

 

Reviews

[Joseph - Michael]

Very impressive on expressing on giving yourself up like that. Making me feel like I have nothing else left to lose and just go on to take that kind of risk anyway...

Anyway, I've enjoyed how you've created the stanzas like that, so simple, yet a bit too much. But, it's still all good there, so no worries...

[Jade Mayhew]

Thanks so much for submitting this! I loved it! Very passionate, your feelings toward the subject. Great job!

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

the subtitle is very amusing, perhaps made the whole score fantastic in its sense...KUDOS!!

[Annalisa]

Mmmmmm. This was lovely, it reminded me of one of my favorite Placebo songs "I'll be Yours" though a darker version. This was... deliciously possessive and dark. I especially loved the ending, "Taste my poison/ Die inside/ and hate me." Great job.

[Jane Doe]

So passionate and intense. Another beautiful piece!

[Lily1111]

Intensely written and portraying hurt in an almost defiant way.

[James K. Blaylock]

I'm really becoming a huge fan of your powerful writes!

jkb

[Thomas James Martin]

Beautifully written, showing such intensity!

[Amanda Naomi]

this is a very romantic piece! Passionate and larger than life. not all endings can be happy and i feel that in the end, both people died inside and both hate the other and themselves.

beutifully written piece. kudos!

[Kiya]

Very deep & intense. Liked it!