Dolphin Love

A little story about a wish that one's beloved dolphin could climb out of the sea and live on land. It's a Pantoum.

Dolphin Love ( Pantoum )

 

Dolphin show your love for me.

May you walk on land someday.

Try to climb out from the sea.

May our true love guide your way.

 

May you walk on land someday.

Leave my sorrows far behind.

May our true love guide your way

as tomorrow’s pathways wind.

 

Leave my sorrows far behind.

The Fates and their ways must bend

as tomorrow‘s pathways wind.

Surely all my tears must end.

 

The Fates and their ways must bend.

I wish I could be with you.

Surely all my tears must end

way beyond the deep dark blue.

 

I wish I could be with you.

Try to climb out from the sea

way beyond the deep dark blue.

Dolphin show your love for me.

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

The Fates and their ways must bend.
I wish I could be with you.
Surely all my tears must end
way beyond the deep dark blue.

I think I would prefer that I could swim like them. I think it must be freeing to have all that intellect and feeling and no hands to tempt you into just not doing. All that said, I do like my hands. I agree, like this poem, dolphins are special.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Pryde! Dreamy is the whim to swim the brim of the Pacific Rim with friendly dolphins.

[Sunny Lotus Eyes]

I like the rhyme in the lines...well done.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Sunny Lotus Eyes! I'm happy that you enjoyed the rhyme, and lines.

[Frontier]

Ahhh how I love dolphins! Truly such magical, lovely creatures, just like this poem. :)
I really like "Surely all my tears must end
way beyond the deep dark blue." So deep, so enchanting.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Frontier! I'm happy that I made dolphins a joy to read about, for they are a joy in themselves.

[Tom]

Reminds me of the many old mariners tales, when lonely sailors fell in love with mermaids and perhaps they were actually dolphins in reality !

A soulful, sincere tribute to a magnificent animal !!

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Tom! Mermaids often swim with dolphins, but only dolphins are aware of them.

[Sourav]

Very nice write and the style of writing is good as well. Quite enjoyable.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review, Sourav! I happy that you enjoyed it.

[Aethereal]

Your love to all animals is so great, as your love to human beings is.... for they are in fact real primates, too, (still) some are code-monkey's, others are repeathing others, or finding inspiration through others work... there is such a truth in this, and who but you, my friend, could give it such a holistic feel, rhyme, aswell, true meaning? no, nobody but you. Funny fact: A Dolphin in Dutch means: "Een Dolfijn" Dol, means Crazy, Fijn means Lovely or Joyable... so a Dolfijn, is a crazyjoyable creature..... or something is just " Dol Fijn ... fantasticly awesome. Well done.. it's just a great write.

- Elisa

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your detailed review, Elisa! In Shakespearian plays, the crazy Jester is always the wisest of them all. The most important thing that a Jester is aware of is how little she knows, and this gives her a great advantage over all those fools who are audacious enough to think that they know everything.

They are the wisest, Shakespear had it already right, they have a lot in common with humans, they can as only dance in front of a mirror, and be as vain, and funny as our race is.... making weird faces, is what they love most about a mirror and seeing themselves in it. :) No wonder why YOU are attracted to this fantastic creature... you are both the most wise ones.... as I put the Jester and the Dolphin to one, Mimic says all ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

Wonderful creatures indeed and so clever indeed like chipmunks( Inside joke).
A lovely wish too...Excellent...:).................

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your funny review, Sami! I guess I get around: Chipmunk love, Ground mole love, Dolphin love, Butterfly love, Puffy Cloud love. Love makes something out of beauty.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. I knew you will like it. You are welcome...:).................

[Lyn Anderson]

Ahh, the dolphin, and I couldn't have said it better than Jacob, although I would like to add you did a great job with this structure.

[Aethereal]

Thanks for your review. KLGoode! The structure was the constraint that I had to follow, and "Necessity is the Mother-of-Invention".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wish dolphins would walk on land...and we could learn from them, something about love, togetherness and peaceful co-existence...they are much smarter than we are.

yet, knowing our weaknesses and faults...they do love us...even though we destroy them...

something about dark blue...feelings of peace but also regret...

[Aethereal]

Congratulations, jacob! Your review expressed the exact intent of my poem. We hurt them, but they love us none-the-less. Dolphins have dark blue feelings, but ours are crimson. Ancestors of the dolphins walked the land long before there were human beings on this planet, then they climbed back into the sea, the peaceful sea where they watched men evolve into the pathetic monsters that they became.