Jack & Jill

Jack & Jill

A Poem by Aethereal
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What happen to Jack & Jill after they went up the hill?

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Jack & Jill

 

Just us two

on a rendezvous

up into the hills

as we brew

passions through and through

touching Nature’s thrills.

 

Though we’re true

to our points-of-view

and their lovely frills,

we are new

to what we pursue

without any skills.

 

Whoop-de-do

in grass wet with dew,

lined with daffodils

where a few

poison oak leaves strew

causing itching ills.

 

Residue

underneath each shoe

breaks both of our wills.

Filled with rue

from this bugaboo

our love turns to chills.


© 2014 Aethereal



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We are going to remember our trip up the hill for all the fun that we had
and all the high temperatures and itchy, itchy feet as well.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Well talk about deconstruction. I am all things music Aethereal and this reminded me when a punk bandtakes a pop song and the outcome Britney Spears gone punk, Oops I did it again played at 200bpm. So in here is not anymore the Jack & Jll I read to my kids and not PG any longer becuase Jack has attitude and Jill does too. And they have no problems getting into relations and situations that may require a lot more discerning than the other ones used to have.

I reckon mother would be more than vexed!!!

Thankyou

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Rene! We all remember things that we've done as naive children that we would.. read more
Thank you for the good morning laugh!
Beware the rendezvous in the hills. :)
That is ALL that I'll say on that.
Enjoyed this one. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Ance! The "hills have eyes".
Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

Uh oh.
I wish I knew that before....
You are a cheeky sort of poet. Ha.
"Nature Lovers Beware" sounds like a great title for another write!
Too funny and probably too common an occurrence.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, David! Yes be careful cuz itchy danger lurks in those hills.
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Ahh, I love reading your writing Aethereal, the rhyme in this whimsical write brought a much needed smile today. Loved the lines..." Whoop-de-do/ in grass wet with dew" But I am sure you knew that my nilly willy nature would gravitate to those light hearted words. Another amazing piece that I truly enjoyed!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Kalypso! Whoop-de-do makes for good mouse trap bait.
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3 Years Ago

haha, oh you make me chuckle xoxoxo :D
Residue
underneath each shoe
breaks both of our wills.
Filled with rue
from this bugaboo
our love turns to chills

The heights of love are terrible place from which to drop. Great one.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Pryde! It all comes down to that natural brain chemistry that all s.. read more
Pryde Foltz

3 Years Ago

Very true.
~~ Now I got a time to spend some time over your pages ~~ Umm,this poem`s nice as usual. I think, it`s too written in some "Meters" .. but i`m not sure. Theme`s about love and your words are all what make me smile. Jack & Jill love story`s now well captured in your rhythmic words with the great flow & precious outlines. I love reading this poem!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your detailed review, Stephen! All lines with the same rhyme sound are of the same meter... read more
Stephen

3 Years Ago

My pleasure! Sometimes, Reading your stuffs meaning walking over the garden of Eden indeed .. i`m al.. read more
Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Just keep at it because metered rhyme is somewhat like rug weaving. Rugs are weaved using patterns o.. read more
I love your writes for so many reasons. I learn and enjoy at the same time even if it is whimsical...Excellent...:)...........

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review, Sami! Whimsical poetry provides contrast.
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Yep. You are welcome...Muchly...:)................
I love this!! It is enchanting to revisit a beloved childhood favorite and wonder, what happened to them? Thank you for this delightful read, oh most gracious Aethereal.... wonderful write, my friend...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Aethereal

3 Years Ago

Thanks for your review!

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