A Song of Sleep

We've been working on sonnets lately in our poetry group. Here's my attempt at Italian Sonnet.

Sing me to sleep on lullabies of thread
A weavers song, plucked by Egyptian hands
One woven from two thousand perfect strands
A dreamers kiss, like silk upon my head

My waking cares, so infinitely spread
Throughout my consciousness, to endless scan
Are in an instant taken to some land
Far distant where no sleeping thought may tread.

Though in the deepest night terrors may rise
Or fill unknowing minds with baseless fears
The dreaming self finds reason little worth
And easily can ban Morpheus' lies
Allowing souls to move from sphere to sphere
Thus bringing rest that gives the mind rebirth.

Author's Note

Would love to know what you think.

Reviews

[Jack...]

very nice images and flow. You have done this genre proud.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much. I am coming to love this genre more and more as I attempt to improve my skill.

[Sami Khalil]

Allowing souls to move from sphere to sphere
Thus bringing rest that gives the mind rebirth.
I like these lines and the whole...:)

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much! I love those lines too, along with the first stanza... Those are my favorite. Thank you so much for reading my work and commenting. I'm so grateful! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Kenilo Kent]

Here is Good Poetry. Finally! Refined, polished and disciplined within the margins of poetry.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much for your encouraging feedback. I feel honored by your complements. It feels satisfying when you work hard on a poem and others like the result as much as you do. Thank you again.

[Kenilo Kent]

Pleasure is all mine.

[Nyonika]

My father is half itallian and I made him listen to this lovely sonnet that you have written I myself want to become a writer or maybe a journalist and your work is really diffrent right now we are in India and it is a land where the art of the ppl is so diffrent just like your's :)

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much for your mind words. I am honored that you would share this with your father. Thank you so much! Sonnets can be very difficult to write, this one was a lot of work to get the rhymes and meter within the Italian sonnet structure and still have the meaning intact. I'm so happy you enjoyed it. Thank you again.

[AnastasiaBetts]

*kind (not mind)

[zainul]

Marvelous work.
Rhyming pattern appears almost perfect.
The concluding lines give a complete message.
Greet you for the efforts.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much for the read and your review. I greatly appreciate it! This poem was work, but I am really happy with the result. Thanks again! :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
It really gives a sense of happiness.
Sonnet is very difficult to harness because of its rigidity.
Getting a good sonnet seems a special divine gift.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Yes, it's been a process -- this sonnet writing thing. This is the first one that I'm actually really happy with. I think I'm finally starting to understand how to work within the form, and even develop my own process for writing them. Now that its starting to flow a little bit better, I'm finding that I actually enjoy the structure and even the rigidity... It forces me to be more creative than free verse. I also feel more satisfied when it all comes together. Like wrestling and winning the match...

[zainul]

You have described the process very nicely.It has enlightened me.
Even then,I would like to learn from you some mysteries about sonnet which you have mastered through your recent exercises.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Certainly. If there are any questions that I may answer for you, or anything that you would like to know, please ask. I am still learning of course. The best learning comes from practicing, and so I continue to practice writing sonnets! :)

[zainul]

Thanks for the lovely gesture.
Please start with the types of sonnets,their attributes and rhyming patterns and thumb rules on making sonnets of different types.
I think,it is the best time for you to share and me to learn.
I also believe that many members of this site will be benefited from our discussion.