Crashing Down

Shes been sitting here alone

In the corner of her room

Trying to keep the thoughts

from entering her mind.

Her world is crashing down

and noone can save her

She hates her home,

She never fit in, and never belonged.

She blocks the world out

Broken and dying inside

Everyday, fighting to walk towards the light

She could never remember

A time she was happy and never will

With blood running down her wrists

Losing consiousness

she whispered,

This world was never meant for me.

Reviews

[Unbreakable]

OH MY GOSHHHHH!!! THIS IS MY FAVOURITE ONE OUT OF YOUR POEMS!!! SO STRONG!!!!!

[Brit Riot]

Brilliant Poem, you did a great job of capturing emotion.
I love this, I can relate to this, and so I am able to put myself in the characters shoes. I can feel what she feels.
Though it is sad, it is true. The feelings you write of are real, and really felt by many people.
Continue to write! This is great work.
=]

[Sara Mercury]

Oddly enough, I had a dream last night about this. Sad, really, when a person feels that the world was never meant for them, when in truth, it was meant for you, or you would have never been here to begin with. Even though this is not how I feel now, I've been here before and can relate to it. Very well put. Dives into deeply dark regions of the mind ... the place I go from time to time, so as to learn more about the dark side of humanity.

[Dawns]

Really nice poem, i like the tempo you used in it. that made it flow really well. only criticism i can really give is some slight spelling errors but next to that it was really well written.