The Girl With the Violin

A Gothic-esque piece...

                               

When the wind whistles,

and the wolves howl.

When the ravens sing their

mournful songs,

there's a girl with a violin.

She likes to play along.

She plays a tune filled with dreams and fears.

A tune made for broken hearts.

She plays all night, never stopping.

Never forgetting each part.

She sits in the forest of heartache.

Plays with a bow of pain.

Emotion flowing through her.

Only release to gain.

There's a girl with a violin.

She plays a sad, sad song.

She sits in a cloud of fog.

She plays her melancholy music,

all the day long.

©2-22-2015 by Ashley Nicole Nordyke

Reviews

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Your first four lines set the dark, sorrowful mood to which she plays along. Even while she plays tunes filled with dreams she is enveloped by fog. It appears her fears dominate the melancholy melodies. She also seems to dwell on the sorrowful parts, never quite able to move beyond what troubles her. Through the eye of her melancholic music we see the broken heart - the pain. Well written Ashley!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you FT.

[andrew mitchell]

A smooth atmospheric piece of melancholy. You are drawn to her and her could almost hear her music of sorrow and pain. Effortless in flow as you meander with this flow. enjoyed once again

[Elisa]

You do an amazing job of establishing atmosphere here. The imagery and syntax are excellent; it all seems really natural yet well thought out at the same time, and that's really difficult to pull off. The "cloud of fog" and the "forest of heartache" are probably my favorite images. Thanks for sharing this, and Write On!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you very very much! Glad you liked it!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

definitely one for the book

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Great, Thank you!

[Nini]

OH MY GOSH...I LOVE this!!! My favorite thus far dear! Beautiful, genius play of words, visional (is that a word LOL?) play on words, I could go on....

[Nini]

Let me just add...dark and beautiful at the same time.

[AaronFreitas]

This was a really beautiful poem Ashley! I really enjoyed reading it. It definitely had a dark tint to the words which I really liked.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thanks Aaron!

[Chris]

I liked the first stanza...

[Tks]

The violin...quite possibly one of the more haunting instruments together with bagpipes:) you have painted a complex picture of suffering in silence here, yet the persona is also depicted as someone who is unfortunately, well-versed with the world of sadness she occupies..all darkness with little respite.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

That's exactly what I was going for. A girl who continuously experiences pain. Thanks for reading!

[Mayank]

I loved the imagery first verse provided, it drags the reader in the world full of black sky and the melancholic sound of violin...

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you...

[GreenEyedPoet]

Loved this!
"She sits in the forest of heartache.
Plays with a bow of pain."

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thanks Ash!