The Power of Forgiveness

This poem is about the power of forgiveness

Forgiveness

We are not perfect

We are imperfections

Flawed human beings with morals, heart, and soul

Scratch hard by the beings called Adam and Eve

Kicked out of the great garden in the sky

The source that we were meant to go

We all mistakes sometimes

And we have all stepped across that line

But nothing is sweeter then the day we find forgiveness

The guilt hangs over us like the clouds of Seattle

It rain's deeper than water

It does a good job at each and every man’s soul

The heart is broken

Wounds have been opened

But those who forgive them often 

Are quicker to forgive them

And the spirit forgave all of mankind for crimes against it and themselves

Even the son bled for forgiveness

When the stones fly and they’re aimed at you

Just say forgive me father

I know not what I do

To take accountability is to walk through the door

To face punishment is to break to the shackles

To avoid lies is to avoid death

To start over is to be free

No matter how lost, hurt, wrong, or who you are

You’re not that far from forgiveness

Ask for forgiveness

We all need it

Author's Note

Do you spot the message in the poem?

This is the revised version

Reviews

[Christopher Casper]

We all search for true forgiveness though it is difficult to receive genuinely. We all have our internal struggles and certainly no one is perfect. We as people seem to be pushing ourselves away more and more from each by being afraid of acceptance. Everything can be crumbling down around you and just one person can come up and say I love you and I forgive you. That can be all someone needs as their beacon of hope. We all need acceptance and we all need forgiveness. It's basic in principal but difficult to receive.

[Double T]

Thanks. That review sounds very meaningful.

[Jamestown]

This is terrific, forgiveness is a must, bible speaks of it often.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Double T]

Thanks for Review. You know not many people look at it because it had spelling problems. But that revision has been done, everyone loves it thank you. :)

[Laura Lynn]

We all need forgiveness! Though it doesn't necessarily do to hear these words all the time, it can be really helpful to hear these words.

[Double T]

This is what my poems are all about: deep, meaningful, and fun.

[BAlanMorgan]

So, i'll take a stab here, either the blaringly obvious message of the poem is to ask God for forgiveness, and be forgiven, or the ironic perspective is that man is accountable for his own actions, and forgiveness doesn't come so easily. Either way, I felt that it had good tone, overall on the better half of the scale, however a few lines needed a little bit of grammar edits. Some words were key in understanding and had an extra s, or something strange, which trips the reader--thus making the poem slightly restrained. In example, this poem flowed well, till the speedbump of the "we all mistakes sometimes." I was stuck here and read it four times over just to be 100 percent sure what the meaning was. I can't wait to read more, but I would just revise works before posting them one more time. I liked the "Flawed human beings with morals, heart, and soul" which seemed to poke fun at a higher entity (as in having good morals, having a compassionate heart, and having a soul that lives in something deeper than comprehension are all bad things. This tickled me. Anyways, I felt there's a few things to work on, but definitely a good start as to where you want writing to be--"you can always rise as a writer" so you've got high places to go if this is the beginning. Just remember to edit things.

[Double T]

Thanks for Advice. I'll take that seriously when I write my poems. Thanks :)