Time

Forever ago there was a time
When the sand slowed down
And the clock stopped ticking
Pausing the quickened breath
And the pounding heart
Of a troubled, worried mind.
Then in a mere moment
Time sped up revealing
If only for a second a life,
A life unlived waiting,
Forever waiting for it to begin.

Reviews

[rpish]

it's always a good time to make changes, well done!

[paul]

'forever ago' - excellent turn of phrase
great ending too

[Jvl narasimharao]

A wonderful poem on time.I love this poem

[Antonio Valentino]

Will you let me know if it gets here, I'm still waiting... :))

Loved this Brette, it sure does seem like that alot of the time.

Antonio xx

[Abhijit aka The Lucky U..]

Very very nice work .... very true .. that is all I can say .. loved it .. !! 100/100

[Jim Parson]

This is brilliant! A perfect capturing of that realization, that exact moment in time when awareness occurs. That exact moment when we realize perhaps it's time for a change.

[imagination101]

Well written, Last two lines stand out to me!

A life unlived waiting, Forever waiting for it to begin: Excellent
Sometimes alot of people wait for their life to begin!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sounds a lot like a person coming of age from youth to adult.