Four Heart Beats

Four Winds

Before you go out that door
Before you leave me behind
I want you to think
I want you to listen to your heart
And tell me how it beats

One beat, says you don't care
Two beats, you're hardly even there
Three beats, maybe you have something for me
But when it's four, you want me forever more

The four corners keep things square
Four bases means there always a home
Forever means always
And the four chambers of our hearts
They beat for truth and love
Four beats for our love

One beat, says you don't care
Two beats, you're hardly even there
Three beats, maybe you have something for me
But when it's four, you want me forever more

I never knew how much those four beats could mean
The feeling when I knew you loved me
The emotion of those palpitations
Four beats over and over again
I didn't need anything more
I didn't want anything more
Four heart beats from you

Reviews

[crap]

The beginning of this poem has a lot of strength to it, for this reason consider cutting it off after the fourth line of the third stanza. This seems to be where your main point is made. Brevity isn't bad, the rest isn't bad, but isn't bringing anything new to the table. I think its a great poem if you make that one change.

[Fran Marie]

And the four chambers of our hearts
They beat for truth and love
Four beats for our love


Four must be the magic number of love~ I like

the 4 chambers of the heart~ and forever~

A very creative write and very nicely penned

THanks for submitting to L13 Contest~Fran Marie