You Win

You Win

A Poem by AliceWithAButterflySoul

You love me
Hate me
Make me
Break me
What have I become?

A shattered life
A sharpened knife
Where'd I put my gun?

Are you ashamed of me?
Why can't you see
The pain you put within

Only when I want to kill myself
You try to smuggle in

You take my heart
You break that heart
Is suicide a sin?

This cursed day
I'll take my breath away
Congratulations
You win

© 2013 AliceWithAButterflySoul



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A great poem, very interesting, and short but very pointed and dark, very nicely done! :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


AliceWithAButterflySoul

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much :D
Bowers

5 Years Ago

your welcome! :D
This is such a powerful write - full of emotion.
A really strong poem - well written too I think. Nice work

Posted 5 Years Ago


AliceWithAButterflySoul

5 Years Ago

Thank you sooo much Lilly. I'm glad you think so. ^.^
I'm actually speechless. I WISH I could write poetry as good as this! You are an amazing writer!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AliceWithAButterflySoul

5 Years Ago

Thanks Kevin :)
You're display and combination of words is wonderful! You made very god imagery, and the message is clear. Loved it! keep writing miss Alice :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


AliceWithAButterflySoul

5 Years Ago

Thank you Kitten ^.^
Kitten

5 Years Ago

of course :)

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Added on November 13, 2013
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Tags: Suicide, Depression, Sad, Lonley, Soul, Love, Hate, conflicted, break, knife, gun, you, win, you win