When She Writes About the Rain

When She Writes About the Rain

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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Sitting in the garden where one finds love in those eyes that speak of alone.

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There is a massive distance
between her smile and tears
when she writes about the rain.
Because her faded dreams
put her mind at ease
behind the places
where she stands
in pain.

Sitting in the garden
where one finds love
in those eyes
that speak of alone.
She writes lines
which intrigue mysteriously.
You can see her words dance
where she's walked,
when dawn breaks
across the trees.

The inner deepness of her words
hold on to each cloud,
crying out to the depths
of our bones.  
They tell us our worst hours
contain the time outside
of her faded dreams
and that they too.....
will soon be gone.

When she writes about the rain
we smile
behind the places
where we stood in pain.  
You can see her words dance
where she's walked,
knowing......
they never speak
in vain.

© 2012 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm



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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Artist *Anna Zero

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you know, Neva, every time i read something you have written about my favorite subject (love) it is as if an angel were sitting at my side telling me how to infuse your words into my being, and it always come to me naturally how to feel deep inside . i've heard of horse whisperers, dog whisperers etc. BUT......you are definitely the love whisperer ! your art is amazing and almost perfection. thank you for sharing this with me

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Neva...you have always, since I have read you...taken the heart, cut it open and absorbed its last beat on sterile floor! In a good way lol
Awesome ♥

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very deep and beautifully written.

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I don't know what to say that has not already been said. I had to read it twice as first time I was numbed by the sad beauty and sense of waste you portray. Lovely poem.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely imagery here Neva.

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another song? Very effective repetition a quite sublime poem You can see her words dance where she's walked.....Quite brilliant

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i especially liked the lines,,,those eyes that speak of alone,,,and, ,,,you can see her words dance. very eloquent!

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A very deep, soulful write. What I love about this piece is the fact that it takes you behind the obvious. We estimate sadness of a third person externally - sometimes casually. This poem takes you deep inside the soul of a person who has lost everything in life and help you to realize how cut-off and isolated you can be from the outside world in moments of distress.
"When she writes about the rain
we smile
behind the places "
Such a beautiful way to sum up the very essence! Well done Neva :)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved one, this visual and haunting line: "Sitting in the garden/where one finds love/in those eyes/that speak of alone..." Still no one puts it like you. What I get from this is seeing someone so hurt, and distant out of it, you can't help but want to love them. I have been so drawn before, but never been blessed or cursed as to put it as you have here. Thank you so much for sharing, Neva. Be blessed...


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"The inner deepness of her words
hold on to each cloud,
crying out to the depths
of our bones."

I could feel this in my bones.. Passionate and sad for me.. it makes me feel like I question the "waiting" I do in my own life.. Wonderfully penned Neva...xo

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Too much beauty to take in all at once...

100/100

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