In whispers

In whispers

A Poem by ChemicalMadness

i watched the trees topped
in certain
circular
frenzy

i thought

something in those leaves
just isn't
shaking
right

and when the breeze of you
breathed across
the top of
me
stirring my own
frenzy -
i sat hard

realization is the exhausted
dawning
of acceptance

unoccupied, the space above
the trees becomes
a beacon

it's clear now -
that ozone taste clings

even the spaces between branches
can sense storms
it seems

© 2014 ChemicalMadness



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Oooh! I really like this one. How easy is to to describe a moment of clarity? A revelation? Not very, but you do it so eloquently here. Great piece!

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Amazing piece as always, it is good to read you again CM.

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ChemicalMadness

2 Years Ago

Thanks,K... Good to see you...

CM.
the apprehension of storms of realization...and then knowing that before our leaves fall we must have acceptance of what that breeze indicates..

really excellent metaphor here.

jacob

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ChemicalMadness

2 Years Ago

thank you, Jacob
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How does one give critic to such a wonderful poem, why wonderful, well because it breathes of things inexplicable, such things that can only be felt and not seen, and beautifully you've expressed it especially in last 5 stanzas

Posted 3 Years Ago


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ChemicalMadness

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
CM.
realization is the exhausted
dawning
of acceptance

This will stay with me for long time. As will

even the spaces between branches
can sense storms
it seems

Not one to cite stanza's in reviews I could not help myself. This poem shook
my branches.

I miss your work CM.

Diego



Posted 3 Years Ago


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ChemicalMadness

3 Years Ago

So good to see you around as well...thank you so much for your words....I'm glad this connected...read more
As humans, we are selfish and careless and this reaches out to the earth, to the beauty that is nature. There is always a clinging sadness that rises when we realise the harsh reality that is. I love how this can be taken literally and/or metaphorically speaking. As a metaphor I see this to be about people, the fact that sometimes you can see the change in a person ever so slightly and know that they will do wrong or have changed into a completely different person, the use of "even the space between branches can sense storms" suggest that to you it seems so obvious, but, nobody else seems to notice. This is written beautifully and i also enjoyed reading it, great job! :)

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ChemicalMadness

3 Years Ago

Thank you!
CM.
Heather

3 Years Ago

You are very welcome! :)
realization is the exhausted
dawning
of acceptance

unoccupied,

I like that.

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ChemicalMadness

3 Years Ago

Good to hear from you, K. Glad you liked that bit :)
CM.

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