~Lullaby of a Fairytale

Metaphors and fantasies = one of my ideas of bliss. I was torn between calling it "Wonderland" what with my name and all, but you'll get the gist.. ;)

Follow me into the darkness of the woods;

I will lead the way.

 

Reach for my hand and grasp it tight;

You don’t want to lose your guide.

 

Looking back at you,

I smile inside and out,

Wishing these minutes never stop

 

Tread silently and tiptoe across the woodland floor;

You don’t want to wake the trees.

 

Try and look only ahead if you can;

Unwanted stares are not welcomed by the bats.

 

I see the light at the end of the tunnel,

And I take you into my world,

Feel your happiness surrounding me

 

Absorb the sights, sounds and smells;

It’s not every day you step into my wonderland.

 

Come lay with me;

Soak your hair in the dew on the soft grass.

 

Simultaneous inward glances capture the moment;

Blushes on my behalf,

Good-hearted smiles on yours

 

Wait for the sun to set with me;

That way you can see the night sky clearly.

 

Wish upon a shooting star, but only if you wish to;

It may come true.

 

[Mine did]

 

This surreal encounter is

Your fingertips touching mine

As we lie side by side in this fairytale.

 

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Cracking. I like this very much. I have a thing about verbs and I like the way you begin each of the main verses with a verb. My eye and mind were hooked to the poem then i saw the word 'Follow' and i did follow you into your fantasy, which is precisely and well expressed. the italisied asides give an extra dimension and spice to the piece, which seems very real. That is to say it is a fantasy first and a poem second.

[Richard McLin]

Very good it had a great style and the way you told it was enchanting. Great piece

Richard