Blackbird

A poem about being willing to change for someone

These are my wishes,
Are they yours?
Can you sustain this devotion?
Are you a trembling ball of emotion?

Your reckless behaviour
Has become mine,
Your habits are slipping,
Into my routine

Maybe you'll be the end of me,
The old me,
Ask me for anything
It is yours

This isn't how to live,
But the burning desire was overwhelming,
I began drifting into nothingness
I am your blackbird.

These are my wishes,
Are they yours?

Reviews

[Mysana]

Well written, my only comment would be to make it clearer that you are changing for them. It felt more like your lives were blending together. Good job. :)

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks for the comment! I'll keep that in mind

[anne]

beauty....so well penned...

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thank you!

[NoelHC]

Nicely done, I enjoyed this. You managed to capture that confusion, we are willing to change for another, but maybe it was the way we were that attracted us in the first place.

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Glad you enjoyed it!

[Riley Justine]

I love this! You can kind of interpret it in your own way which I always love. Amazingly penned. Good job on this poem.

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks for the kind words :)

[Jennie Baron]

This expresses so well the paradox of love, that sometimes its power is so overwhelming we are in danger of losing ourselves in someone else. Very well worded and with a song-like rhythm.

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks for the feedback!

[Colin Ricardo]

[Mila]

Congratulations on winning the Need Reviews? V contest!

Great poem with a wonderful flow, well done! :)

-Mila

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[ashleymarie]

This was a wonderful read!

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks glad you liked it!

[ashleymarie]

I really did! C:

[Lyn Anderson]

Very simple yet describes the complexity of human relationships well.

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks for the comment!

[SkellaRad]

I love how you end the poem with the beginning. I don't know why, but it's wonderful!

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Hey thanks for the comment :)

[DoormanDan]

Blackbird is such an awesome word, and goes very well with this great poem! Good job!

[ConfuzzledKidd]

Thanks I'm glad you like it! Yeah I chose 'Blackbird' for a specific reason maybe you've figured it out !

[Colin Ricardo]