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Compartment 114
Black Sonnet Cafe

Black Sonnet Cafe

A Poem by Damien Thibodeaux
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This one is tough to analyze with the Cobain style lyrics. So if you want to know the meaning behind it, just ask.

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Black Sonnet Café


Let us practice in the dark


She’s a nouveau poetess


In a black lace thrift store dress


Do her right and leave some marks    


Disappearance in the park


Everything just makes me stress


Living in this wilderness


Think I’ll go and shoot up sparks


In the company of w****s


Not so perfect, I’m a creep


Please come back, I want some more


Up all night ‘cause I can’t sleep


Now and then forevermore


Promises that she can’t keep


July, 2014




© 2014 Damien Thibodeaux


Author's Note

Damien Thibodeaux
My first sonnet, so the lyricist in me really struggled with the 14 line structure, iambic rhythm and weird rhyme schemes, as this example of Italian form: abba / abba with a cdc / dcd sestet. I took liberties with traditional meter, writing a trimeter-half-step poem.

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I don't see this as a sonnet, not by the rules I grew up with, but I realize things change. Whether it's a sonnet or not is a point without a distinction. The important thing is, your writing is lyrical & I can feel the connection to various dark artists in genres I cannot name (((HUGS)))

Posted 2 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

2 Years Ago

Thank you for visiting my page and reviewing this poem. You are right, this broke all the rules of .. read more
barleygirl

2 Years Ago

I'm allergic to anything with a name like "iambic pentameter" . . . if my poems have a beat, it's ju.. read more
Well done. Writing a sonnet in any form can be daunting, but you have done very well here.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

5 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. I’m glad you liked it. Yeah, I really took liberties with meter on this. .. read more
I struggle with structure too. I think you did a fine job though.
I do like the Cobainesque lyrics.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Matching Socks

7 Years Ago

You're welcome. :). What is the meaning?
Damien Thibodeaux

7 Years Ago

It's about a girl that comes into a boy's life for a brief time. They were lovers. She likes her s.. read more
Matching Socks

7 Years Ago

I was partially right... Thank you Damien.
How did I miss this one? Deep, dark images - your trademark - and a great rhythm. The form is there, but with your own style Damien.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading, my dear friend. This is the one I was asking your advice about a whi.. read more
Darkly written but wonderfully such...:)...................

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing, Sami.
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)................
WOW WOW WOW. So deep and dark, so moving too. please feel free to comment on some of my work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
a deep darkness to this sonnet piece Damien...with rich imagery expressed throughout ...

well done indeed !

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Fran. It means a lot to me to have you visit. I'm glad you liked it.
  Fran Marie

9 Years Ago

you're welcome dear friend
I enjoyed this a lot. It has a nice dark feel to it. I think you did a great job on the structure.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thanks Tina! I struggled with it, because I wanted it to be a sonnet, but it wanted to be a Nirvana.. read more
Tina Kline

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome.
This is absolutely amazing. I don't care if it is conformist to style perfected or not, this instantly goes in my faves, and gets a shout out. WATCHING the FEED? READ this!!! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I am deeply honored. I don't have the words....thank you.
Love this Damien, having accomplished that taunting feel in a sonnet makes it that muchly better.


She’s a nouveau poetess
In a black lace thrift store dress

The imagery is spot on too, reads as a dark encounter wanting to be revisited time and again.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Damien Thibodeaux

9 Years Ago

Thanks Frieda! Coincidence, I was on your page reading and was distracted by a phone call then this.. read more

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Added on September 1, 2014
Last Updated on September 3, 2014

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Damien Thibodeaux
Damien Thibodeaux

Atlanta, GA



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Just a poet and lyricist with a dark side. Left-Handed and Right-Minded ADD and OCD Inspired to write by Edgar Allan Poe. Hoping to rock you with a little deviance and southern gothic charm. .. more..

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