Boiled Eggs

Not your typical pot of eggs.

Eggs,

Water,

A pot,

That's all that's needed

But for you

Lies,

Games,

And manipulation

Is whats in your pot

I'm boiling eggs

And you're boiling trouble,

What kind of breakfast is that?

Soon you'll realize

That all your fun

Will rise to the surface

 The heat 

And trouble 

Will cause the eggs to explode,

Because of  all the harm you've done to it

There's no point in eating breakfast,

I'm no longer hungry for you...

Author's Note

I thought about this while boiling eggs 10 minutes ago.

Reviews

[Chelemar]

The structure is great. I like how you build it like layers. Love how you compare the antagonist to the boiling eggs. :) Really great metaphor!

The last line brings it all together great. What's the point of it all. The speaker is done with the protagonist and his eggsplosive ways. ;)

Thank you for sharing this. It's really a wonderful piece of poetry.

~Chele

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting poem. I like how you twist a simple tale of boiling eggs to a interesting poem. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[dreaming dame]

I LOVE this! :) The way you combine the two things, it's amazing. :) good job. :)

[LadyNaida]

This is awesome!

[Tom C]

Very well put together.

[Steph K]

This is great! I love that you have incorporated the idea of eggs and connected it with your feelings. Beautiful.

[Quiana Shakia]

Nice write, comparing eggs to something else other than it being just food. short and to the point. excellent

[BlindedMinded]

good structure, kinda abrubt but verrrrrrry enjoyable.. My boyfriend and I are sitting here reading your stuff.

love always,
--BlindedMinded

--Alexandra

[.n.]

Nice spontaneous write. Isn't it amazing where inspiration comes from sometimes? This is a novel comparison, don't think I've ever read a poem comparing a bad relationship to boiling eggs. Nicely done...especially like the last two lines.

[eighwoeifj]

Really unexpected. Very good poem though. Like the comparison between boiled eggs and trouble. The guys before me have said it all, there's almost nothing to criticize. ALMOST.
It's just personal opinion, but I like poems with a rhythm going on and I personally didn't find one in this one.

[Layla J Omorose]

I wasn't expecting that but I was gladly surprised. This is a very interesting and straightforward poem. I truly enjoyed it and really like the first two stanzas. Very good job