Patience

A spot that always greets

happy to host my departing creeps

Quiet, empty of acts

no deeds, no sound but silence

I sit to sink to inner self

among planes to raise

 envision by being immune to demise

Peace sways me

joy plays me

curiosity is met

eagerness trapped in softness of net

Patient

Reviews

[Sesame]

Hello Satoshi,

Nice poem. One question is it quite or quiet?

Regards, Sesame

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Quiet :) I appreciate your correction.

Also, I would appreciate if you do explain to me what "nice poem" refers to.
I would like more elaborated answer since you are one of people who knows how to do it.

[Sesame]

I got a lot of read requests so I try to divide the time I am willing to spend on reviewing. But you are right, I should elaborate of course: I find the poem has a good rhytmn when I read it aloud and next to that I can relate to this state of patience: silence, contemplation, being immune. But also I think it is 'nice' and not 'great', a label I give to poems which I believe I will remember for a long time.

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Much better, Sesame :)
You do not have to bother explaining "nice" next time.

I appreciate your honesty and time.

[MsJewel]

Patience is a virtue - you have shared a lovely message here. I really like your poem. The last verse is my favorite - Peace sways me, joy plays me...
Wonderful wording.

Julie

[Satoshi IroTzu]

I am glad to see that you enjoyed.

[B]

Patience is gold
It really is the gateway to all of life's pleasures
I see in your poem alot of truth
I see positive energy and true wisdom
And i agree with your message here

[Satoshi IroTzu]

:)
As always, I am really glad that you enjoyed.