Goodbye!

There comes a day when a love that’s frail

Will shatter at a touch,

No matter how long it’s been that way

And has hung together, just,

The storm that gathers at eye and lip

Bursts out of a clear blue sky,

In a day of rage that will turn the page

And will leave you asking why?

 

The clouds will gather, the lightning strike

And the swift torrential rain,

Will tear apart an uncertain heart

And will douse your love with pain,

It matters not if you back away

Or appease a fevered mind,

For words are said that in truth are bled

From a feeling most unkind.

 

You’re torn apart in a retrospect

Of the years you thought were fine,

But now discover that ancient lover

Was keeping tabs on time,

It seems that nothing was ever right

That you did in years before,

The cruel asides and the parting jibes

As they slam that final door.

 

It taints the best of your memories

It empties feelings inside,

It’s like a war with an empty core

Tossed in a sea of pride,

But even then when you can’t pretend

That the end is worth a sigh,

The saddest sound in that dismal round

Is that final word, ‘Goodbye!’

 

David Lewis Paget

Reviews

[Warren Daniel II]

Once again your work has left me asking for more, I have no idea how you remain so consistent with such beautiful work. The introduction "There comes a day when a love that’s frail
Will shatter at a touch" just reeled me in, excellent work.

Warren Daniel

[Jack Cassidy]

I think a lot of folks can relate to this, mainly Faust - the endless search for meaning - I really enjoyed your descriptions.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Dam I love this. thanks for the nice poetry.

[Katrina Mckeown]

A very emotional brilliantly penned poem....shot to the heart...breathtaking. ..fantastic use of imagery. ...loved reading this!

[TL Boehm]

yes, we are the sum of our victories and our failures. Of those lost and those who stay This reminds me of that song by Three Dog Night. One is the Loneliest Number.
Well penned.

[Miss Sharon]

(But even then when you can’t pretend That the end is worth a sigh, The saddest sound in that dismal round
Is that final word, ‘Goodbye!’) What a powerful ending to a marvelous and emotion-filled write! To me it is always a joy to read poem written in perfect meter and rhyme. Bravo my fellow wordsmith. ~Sharon

[Mariah Mcintyre]

Wow, just wow. My heart is aching reading this, every part of me can feel the emotion behind this poem and it is beautiful despite the pain it has induced. Thank you for sharing such an amazing poem. Keep it up!

[Philip Muls]

Very sad, very true. Can love stand the test of time really? I guess only by compromising.

Very nice wording, you are an excellent writer in my view.

[-Scribe in Style-]

You words hit the core of emotion!
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[Urja Gokani]

wow amazingly written keep it up !!!