Spinning.

And beneath the layers
{hidden}
Behind a steel barricade

Is my broken, withered heart.

A clutter of shattered pieces lie in a
pathetic heap.

...I Sigh...

And the cage rattles.





I think I can hear your heart beating

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

The image recalls a film of dark kink called The Pet.

The poem recalls the rattling ways of human interactions.

I wonder if the Spinning of the title would enliven the poet's "broken, withered heart."

Usually "Who rattled your cage" refers to a flare-up.

Hearing the other's heartbeat offers a key of possible hope. The cage may open; the heart may heal.

[Aven]

wow, this is one of my favorites by you... the way you balance your words with emptiness "...I sigh... and the cage rattles" it's just incredible!

[Bard Constantine]

Strong emotions delivered in a compact package... harder to do than many realize. This is deep, the lines practically sob... so tragic, yet your talent shines as always...

[Poetry Girl]

this seems like it was purposely put together in a strange way to show that you're spinning. the poem kinda is too. but still its well written.

[Walter Scott Morrison]

My favorite by you so far

[Claire A.]

very nice. i love the imagery of the cage, and the last line is wonderful

[Norma M Sutton]

A interesting short poem.

[Tate Morgan]

beautiful

[PoppySilver]

This is a really good piece of writing love :)
If you can hear thae heart beating, then all hope is not lost!
Great work
xx

[Amber Betty-Marie Child..]

speechless. i never knew what to say about this