Hauntingly

I am on top of the world

and I am crashed down to the ground.

I am so full of hope and futures

and I am at a dead end of my maze.

My talents are meaningless

and quintessential to the human race.

My world

crashes down.

Everything in my mind blurs;

I can't breathe with all these contradictions.

Everything inside me

breaks.

I can't explain these demons,

even I do not know why I feel so vacuous.

I feel like midnight,

but I also feel so intriguingly beautiful.

I cannot explain

why my demons make me feel so high.

I break my skin,

I heal myself.

I hate myself,

I love myself.

I kill myself,

I survive.

I cry.

Reviews

[Awdures]

You wear your heart on your sleeve and that is an admirable trait in any poet. I empathised with this poem, but the only thing to do when your down is to pick yourself up dust yourself down and try try again. Brilliant poem.

[Kaden Sylvers]

The form works really well in this form, sticking to two line stanzas and ending in just one...to me that adds some sort of soft final, a sort of finally giving in and letting down barriers. I especially like the contradictions (hate v.s. love, etc.), it works well.

There are some places where the poem might flow better if you shorten the grammer, break the rules a little...the second line could be "and I crash to the ground" instead of "and I am crashed down to the ground." Also, you could say "I am midnight/I am beautiful"..."am" is stronger than "feel" and will work better with the unhesitant nature of the poem...but "feel" works also...
Overall excellent job, very emotional and powerful. I would try to add more imagery, but it would be hard to do that without breaking the short and concise structure that makes the poem work so well, i.e. making a fleeting/transient tone which works so well. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. You too me with you on a roller coaster of feelings and emotion. I like the flow and the ending. In the end we must get up and be strong. Can't allow the world to hold us down. A outstanding poem.
Coyote