Intuitive Writing #4

Intuitive Writing #4

A Poem by Elephants & Coyotes

i can hear your hesitant silence
louder than an 
atom bomb

and the sliverous little
glances
that weave between the 
minds 

i counted them
once before

when the wind 
blew out your
lashes,

when your
fumbly words
and jumpy fingers
gave away
all
your secrets.

show me the string
that unravels the thing
ive been 
hunting all day
in search for -

the mirror in the rain
that collects all the pain
for gain
that 
ive been waiting
my life
for.

'bunch of student
pollutants,
faces sooted
in black,
fingers
grimey and sticky,
snatching the little
i got.

all ive ever wanted
has been a 
simple enough dream:

to be happy

and sappy
with my lover,
my cream,
to play my part
and finish out
what i 
started,

to exist on this earth -
serene

but there's this itch
i can't get
to succumb to a 
verdict.

this is it.

are you coming
or going?

© 2014 Elephants & Coyotes



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Thanks for the awesome review! All of my intuitive writings are called so, based on the fact that I picked up a pen and wrote the first word to come to mind, then the second, then the third.
So essentially, all of my intuitive pieces are really just "free writing," rather than having an idea and writing about it.

I do these pieces to see what's going on inside.

This one is I gather was about me trying to figure out what was going on with my significant other. It comments on how we often speak to one another, even when neither of us has opened our mouth. On how we can often hear each others' thoughts, via body language and energy. The whole thing is me trying to get into his head, in efforts to figure out what was going on with him and us.

The piece also speaks on those who have attacked my simple dream to be happy with the one I love.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Wow! It's so mysterious yet openly explains. Is it your point of view? Or...I mean the title is intuitive writing, which means different things for differen people. Anyways, your words are hauntingly beautiful and this poem speaks of regret, sadness maybe...of a life gone too soon or a live lived without ever truly having what one desires. So many feels! I love, love, love it! I also hope to read more of your works!!

Posted 2 Years Ago



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