Seduction

This is a departure from The Horror works I've been putting out recently

Seduction 

Slow moving 

Strip teasing 

Pleasure pleasing 

You make it look easy 

Hyper sexual but not sleazy 

Crawl over saying squeeze me 

Your body screaming seize me 

More desires are creeping 

No time for sleeping 

Silky hair in the air 

Our Souls so bare 

Deep thoughts and stares 

Seduction

Reviews

[Generic Author]

Awesome.

I love how the poem began and ended at the same place.

The whole form is seduction: it draws you in with a word, build you up, climaxes, and slowly falls right back to where it began. No progress but passion. Snake eating itself (pun intended).

Keep it up! Great work.

[Ambra Celeste]

This poem flows well and I was able to imagine the seduction of the woman described here, personally I am glad it is not Horror :)

[Jack Kennedy]

Not a big fan of the horror genre huh? :) that's understandable and I'm glad that you liked the poem! Thanks for the review

[Jennifer Henry]

Very well written. I was drawn in by the title, and kept reading to what would come next.

[Jack Kennedy]

I'm glad you're liking it! Hope to hear from you again soon ;)

[Taylor_McCutcheon]

I loved this! The line "deep thoughts and stares" was perfect I just wish it was smaller so the poem kept it triangle shape. Great poem. Loved the rhythm usage.

[Honey-Bee]

Wonderful poem! I love the way it flows and how it all ends in ee's . Thanks for sharing a poem well done!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for your feedback

[Ana B.]

Teasingly sexy. Veery very nice Jack!

[Jack Kennedy]

Thanks for the reviews!

[lissalovesyou]

Wow, this was seduction itself!
The form, the repetition, everything, it was all very seductive. Write on!
lissalovesyou:)

[Jennie Baron]

Whoa, what a departure. Erotic but not crude. A lot of good writers never learn how to walk that line. I love the structure of it, too, the rhyme scheme that holds it together, and beginning and ending with the same word.

[Jack Kennedy]

I always wondered to take off the longer line but I decided to just keep it cause I love the line but I wish I could've found something that was shorter. Thanks for the review and glad you're liking it!

[Jennie Baron]

Was that the "all leads to deep thoughts and stares"? One thing you could do is take off the "all leads to" so you just have "our souls so bare/deep thoughts and stares" unless you have a specific purpose for the "all leads to."

[Jack Kennedy]

I don't have a specific purpose for it. It's just a line but I couldn't shorten it. I might just leave it as is for now. Thanks for the ideas

[The Outsider]

I really like this one man, always good work

[~VertoAtrum~]

Nice flow and rhyming, almost bouncy. Another good one