STOP

STOP

I don’t know

I don’t know why I feel so down

I don’t know why down is how I feel

STOP

I am suffering

I am hiding behind the smile

I am distressed that it is hidden

STOP

I want to be euphoric

I want to be gratified

I want to relax

STOP

I tell the voices to STOP

I tell myself I am okay

I tell myself don’t feel bad

STOP

I will be positive

I will be empowered

I will be serene

START LIVING

Reviews

[Jay. E. V.]

I think you have the making of an excellent spoken word piece.
You could tighten it up by using some stronger verbs. likeeee for example:
instead of "I am mad" it could be something like "I am infuriated." Obviously that word doesnt fit as well, but I'm just making an example=). And I'm still super tired haha;D.
But all in all it is an excellent piece.

[EileenMarie]

I changed it up a bit, thanks!!

[....]

I like this, simple and tells the truth about living.
Simply inspiring

[EileenMarie]

Thanks so much! It helps to just remind yourself to STOP the negative noise and start being positive by changing how you think!

[....]

Some people just can't see that either. Its' all about the choices you make in life. Some people call a glass half empty some call it half full. I see it as an empty glass with new oppurtunitys for me to fill it with. Like this on so many levels. Awesome!

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

A very honest delving into the moment by moment of the oppressive black cloak. I liked the repetition of STOP in this and your determination to START LIVING. The last line is easier said than done, in actuality the living - breathing, etc. - just keeps happening, but living well is to strive for. There is pain in this and it comes through in the form and in the words. From what I have read of you, I believe you will get there.

[EileenMarie]

You make me want to write of peace and happiness which I do have much of!! My kids to begin with, they bring me much joy :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Write it all, but for now do write of your kids. I see your smiling profile picture and think of you that way. A wish for the near future. You will write your way there, I just know it.

[EileenMarie]

I just did my first :)....... stuck in a Nonnet mode but I am glad I penned it. Please view if you get a chance :)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Will do. I must say you do very well with that form. Actually, it is really growing on me.

[Sami Khalil]

I'm suffering
I'm hiding behind the smile.
Oh, what lovers and non lovers have to go through.
Well penned.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

i've been dealing with depression and anxiety for over 10 years now. not my own, but my wife's. it angers me when people like one of your reviewers voice the opinion that depression and anxiety are self imposed. this isn't a life anyone would choose. my sympathy goes out to you and those who love you. it's not easy. i hope things improve for you and that someday, with the proper meds or without, the fog will lift and you will be able to truly enjoy being you.

[EileenMarie]

Awwww thank you! Writing helps that is for sure!! and my blog is EileenMarie being me :) so I am doing what I can to stay positive! Tell your wife to check out some of my writings let her know she is NOT alone and unless you suffer with this affliction you really don't understand........ UNLESS you have a loving supportive person in your life! Thanks for reviewing!

[afra]

AAAAAMMMMMMMMMMMAAAAAAAAAAAAZZZZZZZZIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGG...WOW

[EileenMarie]

Thank you.... some days I literally have to yell at myself to STOP thinking so much!!

[afra]

lol ...you are a amazing writer ...i always love ur work

[Wondering Mind]

I'm not a specialist on the subject of depression, but I think (believe) it is self-imposed.
To me, this write tells of a self-motivation to "STOP" all this negativity, put an end to it, and START LIVING, which is a very clever ending. Basic but brilliant.
I hope writing did help.

[EileenMarie]

Honestly I have anxiety and it is not self imposed, I wake up with it! I have had it all my life at least as long as I can remember. BUT I do believe in being positive and thinking positive as much as I can. Exercise is necessary to help curb it as well. Feeling dread for no reason is horrible and ridiculous at the same time. So I just do the best I can every day and yes writing is absolutely beneficial as it gets the thoughts out of my HEAD.
:)
Thanks for the review!

[Wondering Mind]

Don't mind my interaction, my comment was just to express opinion(mine) and not a fact. I understand from the heartfelt raw write that this is real for you, and I'm glad that you do your best to overcome it, praying that you do find you way out. Oh, and you're welcome :)

[no sun]

This is a brilliant piece as is. Nothing is better than an honest piece of poetry! Excellent write!

[EileenMarie]

wow thank you so much!

[Sujash I. Purna]

you played with those words...ordinary ones...but you rejuvenated them with these STOP loops of yours...and then a START ending...you nailed it coolly!

[EileenMarie]

Thanks!

[zainul]

I guess your casual thought process engendered a great poem of hope and confidence.Tell me if I am wrong.
Well done,Eileen.

[EileenMarie]

Thanks!

[zainul]

Welcome.
You can read my Magnolia and Lovebird if you have good mood and time.

[Mazie Tackett]

i love it especially how you used the stop to change stanzas

[EileenMarie]

I wrote exactly how I felt at the time! Thanks