I Love you...

Thank-you for taking my broken heart and mending it. Thank-you for loving me. Thank-you for everything. I love you...

I can only see you,

Looking back at me,

Only you could capture my heart, my soul.

Vail's have been lifted,

Eternity with you could never have sounded better.

You make my heart pound.

Our love is true for me.

Undoing these ties now is impossible...

For now and forever,

Only you will hold my heart.

Remind me of who I am,

Every single time we are together,

Valentine's day will only be shared with you.

Every day will be shared with you...

Roses are red, violets are blue, You hold my heart, and I will always love you... 

Author's Note

Trying a new style, let me know what you think... :)

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Sweet. Maybe a bit too saccharine, but that's acceptable in poetry! You've alternated short and long lines. Which is somewhat different from the norm, but it works. A little editing, I believe, will go a long way towards making this poem better.

P.S. I think it should be "veils" instead of "vail's"

[John Fitzgerald]

feels very direct, like no words have been wasted.
i can only see is a very powerful opening statement.
i also like the idea that these ties are impossible to undo, that fate is somehow stronger than any personal desire. well done :)

[Kelli Anderson]

This was a really nice poem. I like the style.

[Tai Ryens]

Beautiful use of words and nice positioning of them to make an excellent flow. This new style you're trying seems intriguing, though you could use some polishing in this level of writing.
Keep up the hard work!

[Distant horizons]

Beautiful