LiFe's A BEacH

Ah,the natural shimmering sea.
    I stand in awe of it's beauty.
            I'm free to feel the calming effects,
                     without haste,taking my leisure time

 

 Swimming,soaking up the sweet 
       sunshine on the shoreline,
               where the water meets land.

 

                   much better than chlorinated pools
                       so cluttered by fallen leaves
                       donated by autumn's shedding trees

 

 

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Congrats on your great winning poem.

[Gheeneil]

I so agree. Life's is a beach---so much alike with its depth and nature. Beautiful yet mysterious. I like the alliterative lines: "Swimming, soaking up the sweet
sunshine on the shoreline"

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I totally agree and marvel at the beautiful way you have composed this piece. Thanking you.
FG

[Jimmy Greenie]

Lovely. I agree. The beach is so much better than swimming pools (except pools don't have jellyfish!)

[deeps]

This is a wonderfu l and beautiful write here.
A very lovely read Fran

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Nature beats man made anytime... a wonderfully tranquil and uplifting write.

[kiki756]

Very nice. The way you composed the words is very nice as well. Fantastic job.

[Constance L. Hartwell]

This poem was everything that a beach embodies. It was calming, gentle, and relaxing. You drew a picture in my head using very desriptive words. I enjoyed reading this piece. Kudos.