Apparitions

Apparitions

A Poem by Fran Marie
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A dark moon shone dim light
above me
Sinister shadows danced about
Apparitions of fright
sets of three
Ghosts approached in singular route
 
 
Rash thoughts rushed thru~my mind
senseless dread
Gazing at ghouls dripping in blood
Zombies came from behind
walking dead
wrapped with gory rags soaked in mud
 
 
Dark dreary raindrops fell
thunder clapped
as vague vampires took the scene
Bloodsuckers straight from hell
cloaked in black
These loathsome creatures just a dream?
 


© 2009 Fran Marie



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Congratulations on winning the zombieland contest!

Posted 7 Years Ago


its been a while since I've read you, Fran. I like the ryhme scheme in this one. Its a nice shift from the more traditional meters rampant at the cafe. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A little short, perhaps?

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I love the images this write provoked.
Eerie and exciting.
Just how I like it!
-Elissa :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

OOOoh, how creepy, and gory, and enjoyable!!
Somehow I missed this when you first posted it...I sure am glad you made the edit so I could check it out.
Just love the last lines....Gulp...bloodsuckers straight from Hell!!...YIKES


Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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I too love the picture (hope you don't mind, I grabbed it.) I like the flow of this poem even in its dark imagry. "Bloodsuckers straight from hell/cloaked in black/These loathsome cratures just a dream?" I like that bit the best. Nice write, thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

ooh creepy! great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Amazingly dark and gripping! Your words haunt, and though there is structure and form, you give this work such a freedom. Well done!


Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Congrats on your first place win and what a wonderful write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

brrrrrrr! fantastic!

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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