Does this Matter

Does this Matter

A Poem by C.A.B.S.
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open for interpretations

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She saw me a mile away.
Drinking Mia Tia's by the bay.
She want what she thinks,
Like the sand that fades to waves.
Oh does this matter?

Then she said,
"take my hand and make feel like a woman.
Hold me closer until the night ends
and if you go before I leave,
Then I wouldn't know what to think."
Like floral sands that take a watery shape.

Long Island Ice Teas,
What can Bind us from you through me?
She thinks what can not be true,
Like the water under the spotted blues.
Oh does this matter?

Manhattans and Daiquiris
Hold the glass and drink the fountain.
She is not so easy, under the the sea
But the morning could give us sleep.
Oh does this matter?


© 2010 C.A.B.S.



Author's Note

C.A.B.S.
do you understand the metaphors and the message behind this piece, don't be shy I want to know what you truly think.

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I enjoyed this. As many have pointed out, metaphors are rarely universal but tend to be a reflection of the reader as well as the writer; a bit like those ink blot pictures. For me, this was about one woman and her relationship with drink - with alochol as the 'mistress'. That point when the drink could lead you astray and you're at that semi-inebriated point of thinking "should I carry on?"

Posted 7 Years Ago


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i like this piece alot and the detail and the metaphors work well in this... overall nice job on this... a very superb piece!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love Long Island Ice Teas. lol. Though I am struggling with the metaphors.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I find it a bit disjointed and wandering.It jumps too much from one to another thing

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Very nice write. I get the metaphors and the overall message. Well written and good visual presentation. The idea of longing for something lasting and having something that is temporary are well conveyed. A few changes to make the read flow a little better but still a really good write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You create such a deep blue mood, a longing for something more. There is the desire, the wish for what one has come to believe about life and love. So vivid and rich in your descriptions.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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ok. let me try this again... my laptop is a half wit and when I hit backspace it went back two pages so I had to redo this whole thing... alright... I really can't wait to work on this for band. I think this is one of the most inspirational pieces you have written and I know I've already told you this but this is an awesome piece... but its not finished...

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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