Pull The Trigger

You can hear my heart beating

You say you see it dripping down my chin

But you can only see the crater through my chest that you ripped open

You filled it and seeded it with terror, deep inside of me but I'm not leaving

And I know that I must excel this trial or test

So what're you waiting for?

Pull it!

Ain't nobody gonna do it for you because you know you want to

PULL IT!

Don't hesitate, just do it just shoot!

When I said

I'd die for you and take a bullet for you

I.. I didn't intend

For you to be the one

Pulling the trigger

You stabbed me a hundred times

you acted like you were the one who was bleeding

And the worst part was

Everyone was tending to you

While I was the one bleeding to death

So yeah, maybe you should pull the f*****g trigger.

Author's Note

To me, the thing that is worse than death is betrayal.
You see
I could conceive death
But I could not conceive betrayal.

Malcolm x

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Wise saying of Maloom X.
The poem is elegant and classy.
My understanding- your heart beats(showing your emotions). People probably don't see those feelings, instead they worsen situations.someone makes you feel awful and terrified. Then, you don't quitand PULL THE TRIGGER. Someone acts as if dying but in reality, you are the one who's dying.
Excellent poem or rather lyrics.
Thank you for sharing!

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks Tazeen, I'm glad you liked it and thank your for your honest review! ^^

[Tazeen Ahmed]

You are very welcome!

[Brittany Zedalis]

This reminded me of a song about Russian roulette by Rihanna. I really like this.

~Luna

[Joey Nizz]

That was a good song, haven't heard it in a long time, thanks for the reminding me by it :) and thank you for your review ^^

[Tiffani (Chase) Miller]

Feeling the intensity that builds with each line item in this poem!

[Joey Nizz]

Whatever or however you feel will show in the words you write, thank you for your review, I'm glad that you think so :)

[SamSim27]

"When I said
I'd die for you and take a bullet for you
I.. I didn't intend
For you to be the one
Pulling the trigger"

Very, very good.
I appreciate this piece a lot.
Thank you, Joey

[Joey Nizz]

Your welcome and thank you! thank you for reviewing and appreciating this!

[Carol Cashes]

"And the worst part was
Everyone was tending to you
While I was the one bleeding to death
So yeah, maybe you should pull the f*****g trigger."
I'm from the south and we have a saying: Brother, you know you ain't never lied.
Seen this same scenario many times, I bartended in six states for 18 years. Yup. Many a murderous moll mixing in with the masses. Well done.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you for your review, I'm sorry that you had to see it for 6 times and all in different places, I guess no matter where we go sometimes things wont change.

[Carol Cashes]

Some people will always be "victims" until their next "kill". It's a sad truth and hard to watch without taking action. But passive observances have taught me many a hard lesson I didn't have to experience first-hand.

[Joey Nizz]

I'm glad that you didn't experience these things yourself, it is also hard to watch.
Sometimes its best not to experience these things but to learn from them to avoid them.
Life is a book that we are still learning from, all the experiences and all of the new things we face with each chapter or page in life.

[Carol Cashes]

I think being on the other side of the bar made for a perfect observation deck, so to speak: I was not there to referee relationships, only to control the crowd. I told another author on this site, that I can promise you, that in my experience, there are way more good men then there are good women. It's just the bad men get more press.

[Joey Nizz]

Yea I agree with you, I haven't worked as a bartender but I worked in bars before so I understand where you are coming from.
You learn a lot from someone or anyone behind the bar on the stool.

[Tabby Mac]

Wow Joey! This is a powerful write. A bit scary and dark coming from you, but it is well done. Even though I know first hand about people who betray it never fails to shock me when I think that we all have a story of some one betraying us add them all up there are far too many people that lack integrity.
That makes me sad.
Tabby

[Joey Nizz]

Sometime I like to write about what I feel or what I see, I guess there's only balance if we have both, betrayal and loyalty and other thing, sadly and ironically we cant have it all or we cant always have what we want.
It also makes me sad to see that some people behave like this, no integrity, no honor or respect, we live in a world that's going backwards instead of forward, people have forgot it all, and it hurts me to say and know this.

Thank you for your review Tabby :)

[Tabby Mac]

Me too! Always a pleasure to read you!
Tabby

[rowan.taylorrr]

this is so... emotional. it's a ride that was felt a lot and has much emotion. well work:)

[Joey Nizz]

It is one hell of a ride, thank you for thoughts and your review :).

[Chase Dylan]

Pull the f*****g trigger already, and be done with the trigger sensations... Holy, was a good ride, man... Malcolm X channeled... Rippingly penned...

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks man, your review means a lot to me :)

[Chase Dylan]

Of course, your words mean much to me as well, keep writing...!

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks, you too :)

[Zephyr]

I loved the poem Joey!
"When I said
I'd die for you and take a bullet for you
I.. I didn't intend
For you to be the one
Pulling the trigger"
I felt so sad reading these lines. You sure are a wonderful poet.
Keep writing!

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks Neetha I'm glad you liked it :)

[Abhishek Asthana]

totally agree with your point of view and totally impressed with the way you have written... its so touching and emotional... really liked it... awesome job done joe

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you, Im glad to know that you agree and liked it :)